Descriptive Writing: Revision

Contributor: Delaine Thomas. Lesson ID: 12310

What do you and famous writers have in common? You both have to revise your work! Yes, even the greatest writers don't get it perfect the first time around. Learn to make your writing involve readers!



English / Language Arts
learning style
Auditory, Visual
personality style
Grade Level
Intermediate (3-5)
Lesson Type
Quick Query

Lesson Plan - Get It!


The revision process can take your rough draft (caterpillar) and make it a beautiful piece of writing (butterfly)! Don't hide in a cocoon when it comes to learning how to revise your work; make it come alive!

A descriptive essay presents a detailed, vivid picture of a person, place, thing, or event.

The reader should be able to visualize the person or place from the word choices the writer has made. The more descriptive the language, the better the reader is able to visualize the story.

In the previous word choice lesson of our Descriptive Writing series, you wrote an essay using descriptive language about a particular setting and characters that you chose. If you completed that lesson, take out your essay now. If you did not complete that lesson, take out a descriptive writing piece that you have completed.

If you need to review the previous Related Lessons found in the right-hand sidebar, take time now before you continue.

During the revision process, you will use the questions below as well as others to help you improve your writing and make it more descriptive:

  1. Do I include enough sensory details?
  2. Do my beginning, middle, and ending parts work together?
  3. Do I show the reader the setting and characters clearly?
  4. Do I use specific, descriptive words?
  5. Do my sentences read smoothly?

Before you begin revising your essay, watch Robin Neal's Descriptive Writing in Simple Terms for more ideas on revising your essay. Just watch the video this time; you will watch it again later in the lesson and complete some revisions at that time.


Now, continue on to the Got It? section where you will begin revising your essay.

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